Creation is A Hurt

Balthier · 2009-09-07, 20:04

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"Some people say Pain can't hurt you
Other's say Pain be a vuo do
My Days may come to an end
While you may be up in a bend
Listening to my Sorrows
I will continue to sorrow and borrow
For what has come up
into the meaning of life"

Ok please tell me what you thought about it.

Narora Senoku · 2009-09-07, 20:19

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I like it, if there was a rating it would be 7/10 :D

nova · 2009-09-07, 20:23

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great work, also you had a bit of errors, what is vud do? DXX

Riku_Keyblade · 2009-10-03, 19:17

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Balthier wrote:
"Some people say Pain can't hurt you
Other's say Pain be a vuo do
My Days may come to an end
While you may be up in a bend
Listening to my Sorrows
I will continue to sorrow and borrow
For what has come up
into the meaning of life"

Ok please tell me what you thought about it.

cute poem. XD i like the second sentence, which was very nice.

Sora · 2009-11-20, 12:30

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I think its interesting, just make it longer nd cleaerer

**L'arc en ciel** · 2009-11-21, 11:28

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it's cute ^^ short n sweet

Roxas · 2009-11-21, 21:48

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Balthier wrote:
"Some people say Pain can't hurt you
Other's say Pain be a vuo do
My Days may come to an end
While you may be up in a bend
Listening to my Sorrows
I will continue to sorrow and borrow
For what has come up
into the meaning of life"

Ok please tell me what you thought about it.

I like it. What does "vuo do" mean?

**Carey** · 2009-11-22, 09:39

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Roxas wrote:

Balthier wrote:
"Some people say Pain can't hurt you
Other's say Pain be a vuo do
My Days may come to an end
While you may be up in a bend
Listening to my Sorrows
I will continue to sorrow and borrow
For what has come up
into the meaning of life"

Ok please tell me what you thought about it.

I like it. What does "vuo do" mean?

Have you ever heard of the doll story with the magic thing. It's called "vuo do" with the puppet and the needles. (etc.

risingfalls · 2009-11-26, 08:52

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I saw a few errors, your not a noob at writing T_T,
but you can atleast make the story a bit more interesting as well.
5/10

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